I've never remembered to comment on this story before, but today I really feel like I should.
This is simply amazing- you have beautiful imagery and language here, which manages to support a largely narration-driven story very well. The one reason I tend to shy away from stories with large stretches of narration and little dialogue is that many authors tend not to be able to write it well. Not so with your stories, and Girl's Own Adventure is, I think, a shining example of why.
It's poetry in prose, and does a wonderful job of detailing the relationship developing between Ginny and Luna.
She raised her eyebrows. “And adventures in girls’ company can be just as enjoyable as ones with boys, and as safe.”
Hermione looked simultaneously fearful and fascinated. “Ginny, who were you with last night?”
Ginny winked at her and walked towards the showers.
This was very interesting- on the surface it's a relatively simple state, but Hermione's description, 'fearful and fascinated', casts a new light on their conversation.
I am admittedly a little disappointed that you don't write more femmeslash- you're very good at it ;) Thank you for such a lovely story!
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Date: 2009-11-12 11:43 am (UTC)This is simply amazing- you have beautiful imagery and language here, which manages to support a largely narration-driven story very well. The one reason I tend to shy away from stories with large stretches of narration and little dialogue is that many authors tend not to be able to write it well. Not so with your stories, and Girl's Own Adventure is, I think, a shining example of why.
It's poetry in prose, and does a wonderful job of detailing the relationship developing between Ginny and Luna.
She raised her eyebrows. “And adventures in girls’ company can be just as enjoyable as ones with boys, and as safe.”
Hermione looked simultaneously fearful and fascinated. “Ginny, who were you with last night?”
Ginny winked at her and walked towards the showers.
This was very interesting- on the surface it's a relatively simple state, but Hermione's description, 'fearful and fascinated', casts a new light on their conversation.
I am admittedly a little disappointed that you don't write more femmeslash- you're very good at it ;) Thank you for such a lovely story!