That was an intense chapter. I like it that Kingsley finally! decided to act. His indecisiveness and lack of clear understanding of the situation really pissed me off. If that was you aim for his character, then you've succeeded.
I'm glad that you had Harry act in his defense, try to do whatever he can, rather than take the course of him being saved by Draco and the others. I like that Harry was his own man, did whatever he could under the circumstances and even managed to make a difference on his own.
I see that this story starts to move towards a resolution, unless I am terribly wrong, but you are generally not one of those that make fake peaks and then change the main plot-direction, so I asume the story is in its final stage, no matter the number of chapters necessary for the conclusion to be reached. Diggory's manipulations and crimes are close to being brought to the open, and probably the only other things that need some clearing would be Lucius/Narcissa's future and of course maybe a bit onHermione dealing with getting off Desire. Though both of these can be easily dealt with on the side. I'm not trying to give you ideas or direct your story, I'm just contemplating.
Anyway. Excellently done. One of the reasons I didn't comment on the last chapter was that I was a bit annoyed how arranged it all seemed to me as far as the trial went and I wanted to know more before I made my mind. It just seemed too convenient and unbalanced to fit your style, so I reserved judgment. I still think it was too convenient, but I like the explanations, the motivations and the development and I don't mind all that much any more.
This chapter was very good, and I am waiting for the next one.
P.S. I haven't started your new story, I'll probably wait till you are a few chapters into it, before I pick it up.
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Date: 2008-07-01 04:14 am (UTC)I'm glad that you had Harry act in his defense, try to do whatever he can, rather than take the course of him being saved by Draco and the others. I like that Harry was his own man, did whatever he could under the circumstances and even managed to make a difference on his own.
I see that this story starts to move towards a resolution, unless I am terribly wrong, but you are generally not one of those that make fake peaks and then change the main plot-direction, so I asume the story is in its final stage, no matter the number of chapters necessary for the conclusion to be reached. Diggory's manipulations and crimes are close to being brought to the open, and probably the only other things that need some clearing would be Lucius/Narcissa's future and of course maybe a bit onHermione dealing with getting off Desire. Though both of these can be easily dealt with on the side. I'm not trying to give you ideas or direct your story, I'm just contemplating.
Anyway. Excellently done. One of the reasons I didn't comment on the last chapter was that I was a bit annoyed how arranged it all seemed to me as far as the trial went and I wanted to know more before I made my mind. It just seemed too convenient and unbalanced to fit your style, so I reserved judgment. I still think it was too convenient, but I like the explanations, the motivations and the development and I don't mind all that much any more.
This chapter was very good, and I am waiting for the next one.
P.S. I haven't started your new story, I'll probably wait till you are a few chapters into it, before I pick it up.