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lomonaaeren ([personal profile] lomonaaeren) wrote2007-10-22 04:40 pm

Got another story idea.

Got attacked by another story idea last night, in the usual way, with me falling in and out of sleep, and adding more and more to the story’s plot during the time I was awake.

First I thought it was a one-shot idea. Then I thought it was a longish one-shot. Now it is probably going to be novel-length.

Argh.



Title: Forgive Those Who Trespass (which, yes, indeed, I kidnapped wholesale from the Lord’s Prayer)

Summary: When his friends vanish into the Department of Mysteries, Harry goes searching. The last person he expected to stumble upon in the hunt was Draco Malfoy. But is Malfoy another victim, or actively involved in whatever plot has taken Ron and Hermione?

(I will have to change the summary. It sounds cheesy).

Longer summary: This is post-DH but not epilogue-compliant (obviously). The Unspeakables have grown more powerful in the wake of the war, because, due to their innate paranoia, they were the hardest of the Ministry’s departments for Voldemort to infiltrate, and thus have the most people free of corruption. Now their power is being expressed in weird ways. Or so Harry’s heard. Since there’s never any solid information available, there’s really nothing for him to chase, and he’s occupied with his training as an Auror and living apart from Ginny (due to his recently revealed sexual orientation) anyway. This seems to have no relevance to him.

Then Ron and Hermione, who are also in Auror training with Harry, get fed up and switch to Unspeakable training, citing a combination of their exasperation with the Department of Magical Law Enforcement and the fact that the Department of Mysteries sounds more interesting. Harry accepts it, because, well, why shouldn’t he?

Then Ron and Hermione vanish, along with all the other trainees, and the entire Department of Mysteries goes instantly incommunicado. Harry tries to figure out what happened, but his superiors are not being cooperative. Harry gets the sense that they’re frightened of the Unspeakables and don’t want to risk a further decline of the Ministry’s reputation by taking the story public.

So down he goes into the Department of Mysteries, alone. There are traps waiting at every corner, and, in the first or second room he searches, Draco Malfoy, who apparently left the country in embarrassment after the war was done. Malfoy can’t speak, and his hands have been Transfigured into deformed flippers so that he can’t write. None of the spells Harry tries on him can reverse his silence. He can, however, communicate by nodding and shaking his head—as long as Harry asks the right questions.

Despite not trusting him, Harry can’t leave him there, and takes him along. Besides further traps and further mysteries (ha-ha, bad pun), he starts running into shimmering Pensieves full of memories. These turn out to be Draco’s memories, apparently serving some mystical purpose, since they’re always guarded. From them, Harry learns more about Draco’s past and some of the horrors he’s suffered in the past year. Both his compassion for and his distrust of Draco keep increasing.

And the deeper he goes, the weirder things get…

This will be a horror story and an action/adventure as much as anything else. The romance will be conducted mainly through the fact that Harry gets to know Draco better as somebody he wants to protect and through his memories (I cannot have a Draco POV, since that would immediately reveal everything that was going on). It will also provide me with the opportunity to play with the Department of Mysteries, which I think is one of the most neglected areas of canon.

I know what the major revelations will be. I do not know exactly how it will end, though.



Yeah, and I thought I wasn’t going to have another novel-length story idea for a while, since I was entertaining only one to work on after A Determined Frame of Mind and I Give You a Wondrous Mirror are finished. That’s Written By the Losers, a post-DH time-travel novel.

Guess that won’t work. The damn things seem to come in pairs.

[identity profile] neji-chan.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
Horror stories being my favouite kind, I love this plot. The Department of Mysteries is, well, a mystery, so there are tons of possibilities and with your imagination... it would be a pleasure to read it. Plus, I always had a fascination with the Unspeakables, and what their job would be like. Add mute!Draco to the mix...

A time travel fic? Aghk ::dies:: I ADORE time travel!!! XD Ever since I saw Back to the Future when I was a kid. Diana Gabaldon and Stephen King
just added fuel to the fire some years later ::excited::

[identity profile] shukuun.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 04:42 am (UTC)(link)
Wow, that sounds really interesting. =) I'd love to read it if you do write it. Like the others, I certainly wouldn't mind reading it as a WIP--regardless of how often you update. =)

[identity profile] suonguyen.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 05:57 am (UTC)(link)
Oh wow you have certainly spiked my interest! I love the whole ideas of the unspeakables thing, I don't think I've ever read a fic about them before, and I'm certain you're going to write them full of mystery! hehe. Can't wait for this story... Will it be after your other ones are done?

[identity profile] glorafin.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 07:24 am (UTC)(link)
The summary sounds great. I'm looking forward to it. :)

[identity profile] dysonrules.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 02:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Argh, cliffies kill me with suspense, especially yours.

Hey, I'd even be willing to *cough* beta *cough* if you need one.

Glad my comments aren't making you dial the cops to haul away the crazy stalker woman, lol! On a semi-related note, I kept thinking about your last chapter of Determined. I really liked it. It's a rare fic that makes me turn over scenes in my head, but their declarations of love were sort of a slow, subtle squee that snuck up on me. Harry's so sweet. *pets him* *pulls back smoking hand from Draco's hex*

[identity profile] yumikoyoshihana.livejournal.com 2007-10-23 09:08 pm (UTC)(link)
I just read the summery to the other WiP that you were planning, and I have to say, its a fantastic Idea. I just think the world in general is a better place when you're writing something. (Well, my world at least.) There's something just so wonderful about being able to come home and look forward to a new chapter of a favorite fic, you know?

Thats a good point, about the DoM. Though, I'm not a writer, so I wouldn't know.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 01:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Sorry! (In that not-sorry-at-all way...) :)

I would really appreciate the offer of a beta! Since I write so fast, though, it would be a big job. Let me know if you'd be willin to help with the next WiP's.

I'm glad that chapters lingers in your mind. It is a big turning point, even if it wasn't for the reason most people thought it would be when they read the cliffhanger.

Determined!Draco is so possessive of Harry that he scares me a little.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 01:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

And I know the feeling. Alas, I seem luckier in writing fic than finding fic like that; I know a few authors who update often, but only one of them writes fic I really like (and that one's actually gen, not slash).

Some people are happiest when they have canon to follow. I'm happiest when I have a little wriggle room to stick bits of non-canon knowledge in (things that are probably not true, but might be).

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 01:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

Those Pensieve memories will be some of the worst parts of the story, except for the very end.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

Yeah, that's one reason I want to change the summary. (If nothing else, summaries that end in questions are almost always hokey. "Will Harry and Draco fall in love or be torn apart?" Gee, I wonder what the answer to THAT question is!)

I'm happy I can fulfill that place for you. God knows that I like it when I find authors who have a varied voice (some don't, and others vary the genre of the stories but leave their characters the same every time).

There is one story I have in mind that does have a pretty horrible ending. But there, it's not "life sucks so they died," so much as "life sucks in ways they never imagined." And it would be a one-shot, not a novel. I can deal better with gloomy one-shots than novels because I have less invested in them.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I already have lots of ideas for traps and dangers, which I hope will be sufficiently varied.

The time-travel fic excites me, but also scares me. For one thing, it will depend on keeping careful track of canon, and I haven't read the books before DH all the way through in a few years.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

I'd try to update them regularly if I started posting them. And I'd definitely let people know if I could only update once a week or something similar.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

I've read a few fics where the Department of Mysteries is mentioned, but usually less as a place and more in the sense of, "Harry goes to get Sirius back from the veil" or similar. Likewise, sometimes Hermione will have a job as an Unspeakable, but it's very rarely detailed or an important part of the fic.

And yes. No way am I starting this story while I still have Mirror and Determined to finish.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks!

[identity profile] dysonrules.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 02:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Squee! I'll definitely beta for you! I read as fast as you write, so I can zip them back to you quickly.

I love Determined!Draco! I think his possessiveness sort of scares Harry a little, too, which is just fine. It explains some of his reluctance to succumb Draco's charms. Oh how I love this fic!

[identity profile] damedbx.livejournal.com 2007-10-24 08:36 pm (UTC)(link)
WOW!! that seems like an awesome story idea. I cannot wait to see anything written. DAMN. i got to go now...hOMEWORK!!

In all in all, i would be interested in reading this...

BTW, did you ever answer the comment i made?? i can't remember what exactly it was on...but mind if i add you as a friend? it seems that my inbox doesn't want to slow down on the increase. LOL

[identity profile] usyagi.livejournal.com 2007-10-25 06:11 am (UTC)(link)
mute!Draco? OH MYGOD. Yes. Please? With candy on top? He's a secret weakness of mine, and I'm always too busy to finally write that muse myself. Please please please?

And novel-length too?!

Although, here is a suggestion to keep from the flipper hands: There was an episode on Star Trek Deep Space Nine, in the first season, when there is a virus that breaks the connection in the brain that enables "encoding", which in communication means... the ability to put thoughts into a form that can be transferred as a message to the decoder. Maybe, instead of the hands being flippers.. maybe... Draco has lost the ability to encode his thoughts. It's all jibberish, literally. That would keep him from writing; as for his voice, it'd be easy to make a spell or potion just render his vocal cords.. paralyzed.

Thought I'd help with a suggestion! Keeps Draco in possession of his hands. They just.. don't help him in the way of communicating.

[identity profile] usyagi.livejournal.com 2007-10-25 06:13 am (UTC)(link)
PS. I forgot to comment that the ideas of a time-travel plot peaks my interest as well. I love them. I am currently working on one fan fiction right now, but following that, I think I will write a fan fiction of my own that takes my twist on time-travel romance. So I love seeing similar products from authors I could actually respect.

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-25 07:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

Sure, you can add me as a friend. :)

[identity profile] lomonaaeren.livejournal.com 2007-10-25 07:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, he will definitely be mute. Just not sure when the story will be written. :)

Unfortunately, I really need Draco's hands affected somehow, because aside from being unable to write he also needs to be unable to make gestures that might lead Harry to an interpretation of the truth so soon, and unable to use a wand. And mutilation is a theme in this fic, so it will probably be that.

[identity profile] byaghro.livejournal.com 2007-10-28 03:56 am (UTC)(link)
Weren't the declarations of love AWESOME!!! I think that is my favorite chapter of Determined so far. I was a little stressed at how much Draco was pushing Harry to sleep with him but as soon as Harry said no I'm like "Aw! Dang it!" and then Draco's casual declaration of love and Harry's SWEET one at the end! *keek* I giggled the rest of the day after reading it!

[identity profile] byaghro.livejournal.com 2007-10-28 04:05 am (UTC)(link)
"Will Harry and Draco fall in love or be torn apart? Will Neville finally get the girl? Does Lucius Malfoy secretly wear pink knickers?" All of these questions will be answered on the next 'As the Time-Turner.. um.. Turns'!! Yea, definitely hokey. *grin*

I agree with you about gloomy one-shots! How can you bring yourself to work with the characters, develop them and their relationships... just to give them a sad ending?? I'll admit that some sad endings, or at least some 'less than they lived happily ever after' endings, are necessary and the only realistic conclusion to some stories / situations but still! The real world has enough gloomy endings without us writing more. We should had fluff and happiness to the world, with a bit of angst & drama just to keep everyone from getting cavities!

[identity profile] issahime.livejournal.com 2007-10-28 07:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, now I want to read that! I love the rpg-feel of the adventure aspect, and there seems to be a shortage of good horror H/D fics. And Draco without a voice will be interesting. I've only read one other story where that was done well, and I would like to see it again.

[identity profile] dysonrules.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 02:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh hell yeah. I'm so loving Harry in this one. I just want to squish him with cuddles. Well... I want Draco to do it. And he kind of is. New chapter today!!!!! WOO! Off to read.

[identity profile] damedbx.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 10:19 pm (UTC)(link)
yay!!! Thanks! :D Sorry it took so long to reply. inbox flood!!! ^_^

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